Goa Memories : Part 4
This is the final part of the Goa Series. We have tried our best to finish it with a banger of a chapter. Hope you guys enjoy reading this as much as we enjoyed creating this.
Chitra, Shalu, and Marcus rushed into the police station, their faces a mix of worry and urgency. As they entered, the girls belatedly realized they might have drawn less attention if they’d taken the time to change into something more modest. The station grounds were teeming with people—mostly men—and all eyes instantly locked onto them.
Chitra’s vibrant red cropped scarf top barely grazed her midriff, leaving her deep, round navel prominently exposed above her flirty mini skirt. Shalu, equally stunning in a black one-shouldered crop top and a slit skirt that swayed with her every step, exuded an effortless elegance that made heads turn.
Marcus, walking protectively behind them, bristled at the attention they…
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And very well written
Loved every bit of it. These are few suggestions from me. Bear in mind your stories are one of the best one can get in internet for this niche fetish.
1. Make the FMC more aware of their navel’s sensitive and erogenous nature and emphasis them acknowledging its vulnerability and their fear/nervousness when they are about to engage in navel fetish activities from good characters( friends, family, spouse) or bad ones( The inspector or any such character who coerces them to do this ) .
2. Make the power dynamics in navel scenes with negative characters more one sided with them controlling the proceeding with FMC have next to no over the proceeding. When its between FMC and friendly characters make the power dynamics flexible depends on the situation and people and make the navel play more subtle, variations etc. Emphasis point one along with it.
3. Make the navel play rough, unpolished and uncontrolled way with more nibbles, hard smooches( more slurpy like in a JAV video), licks etc if it is from characters like this inspector as they’re a bit obsessed, desperate, doesn’t have much opportunities to taste a navel like this. This contrasts well with the reluctance, uncomfort and disgust felt by Shalu, Chitra or anyone like them and the sexually frustration/ desperation/ obsession/ perverseness of these negative characters amplifies their body’s betrayal, involuntarily orgasms and reactions.
Woaa thanks a lot bro. Will surely keep those points in mind next time. The idea did cross my mind to make the inspector more negative and the girls experience kind of unpleasant. The reason I didn’t is one I didn’t want it to go to the extend it could cause trauma for all of them and the other was I wasn’t sure if the readers would enjoy it or find it disturbing.Again thanks for taking the time you drop such a detailed feedback. Appreciate it.
Worth every penny I spent getting these stories. You know how writing well goes as far as I’m concerned. Loved the food play here too, but some variety would be nice (Maybe in the future where Chitra allows her belly to be on the menu for lunch as hinted in chapter 2) with a proper Indian meal this time.
I also loved the teaching and experimentation aspect in chapter 2 with Arjun teaching Sid how Chitra’s belly behaves, and it would be nice to see more of that where Arjun teaches him more ways and games to play with her belly and navel and Sid also teaches Arjun.
Definitely also would love to see more cases of Navel magic where she uses it to escape unpleasant situations with more varieties of encounters (eg, her friend gets in trouble with a local village gang and he has to write his apology letter to the panchayat on her belly and they let him go after they play entertain themselves with it and her navel).
This one is more random, but also a scene (or chapter) where Akki, Sid (and maybe Arjun, Vasundara and Marcus too) play games like Ludo, Sudoku or Snakes and ladders on Chitra or Shalu’s belly, as they use it learn more about which parts are more ticklish, and the winner gets to have complete access to her navel for a few days. I suggest this because I also love the playful competing aspect you had in Chapter 1 and 2 between Arjun and Sid and the possessiveness Sid feels for her belly and I’d like to see more of it if possible.
Yet another scene suggestion would be Chitra helping Sid with his homework or school project (possibly also with Akki as his teammate) by letting him do it on her belly (with Karthik’s help maybe), and she goes to school with him and he presents her belly to his teacher while the teacher examines it and grades it having fun in his own way.
All these are only my opinions, and I know it would be a little hard to find places in the overall plot to fit in these isolated scenes, but I know if anyone is capable of doing it, you are. And whether it takes a month or 10 monrhs to get this, I’m more than happy to wait. Anyways, keep up the great work.
Wow those are some really juicy suggestions. I can think of a few places where we can plug in some of them in some of the coming chapters. We’ll see. Thanks for taking the time to send this bro. Appreciate it.
Wooooooooww!!!! No words..Just a Royal Salute to your writing bro
Haha thanku thanku…..also can you message me when you are available bro. Want to discuss somethings with you.
Can you please update the story waiting for what will.happen in present
Have been caught up with work and some personal stuff bro. That is why the delay. I will be droping an update soon. Stay tuned.
Eagerly waiting for it bro pls update it asap